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Comment on Brown Eyed Blues – FINAL by marshmallow@888

marshmallow@888 — Fri, 20 Mar 2009 10:59:44 +0000

This is a good story. I like how there is a lot of details and dialogue (But not too much) and how they explain the characters. I like you can create the character’s feelings well and how you make them “pop-up”. Any ways great story!

Comment on Brown Eyed Blues – FINAL by arianna

arianna — Fri, 20 Mar 2009 07:21:50 +0000

I thought this was a pretty good story after we went over it and changed all teh flaws in the point of view and stuff. Your story has so much dialogue! Not saying that’s a bad thing. Well all you have to do is go through it a check for grammar and spelling mistakes like that.

Comment on Especially for you – - SHORT STORY. by Maggie

Maggie — Tue, 17 Mar 2009 03:34:06 +0000

Omg! Thats was so good. I like the style of the diary for your story its new and fresh. Also I liked the details and the casual dialouge added in. It was great. The only thing i would suggest is to expand it more.

Comment on &It’s because of you; I can’t let go by Ana$tA$$i@

Ana$tA$$i@ — Thu, 12 Feb 2009 22:45:49 +0000

YOur stury was really good, but you need to organize you dialoge into paragraphs like daylan said :] and add more description, likw what they are feeling! Its good:)

Comment on &It’s because of you; I can’t let go by daylan

daylan — Thu, 29 Jan 2009 22:46:22 +0000

i think you should like organize the dialong & make them into paragraphs. you know what i mean ? yee.
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Comment on Hitler’s breakdown by shannon

shannon — Fri, 19 Dec 2008 07:11:39 +0000

i really like this
i like the end of the 2nd paragraph
when your asking those questions its really good
and i really like the poem its way better than mine
this really describes hitler

Comment on Limit? There’s no limit by arianna

arianna — Fri, 19 Dec 2008 06:03:33 +0000

This essay was very intriguing. The title just pulls you right in, ” Limit? There is No Limit?”. Your titles are always so creative, and I found your thesis and understood it right away. This was a pretty good essay but I think you cold make it a little more flowing between paragraphs and a longer. But otherwise great essay!
– arianna.

Comment on Limit? There’s no limit by Paul

Paul — Fri, 19 Dec 2008 05:44:07 +0000

I thought this was a very powerful story. I do not know where the plot is or What but its still very good. kepp doing what you are doing.